Can anybody correct this text in english?

Feel free to change words or sentences



I was passing a really ugly period of my life, now to live seemed to me useless, what had happened to me in the last times was for me something unbearable, ugly, it was destroying me. All the people near to me were worried for my health: I didn't go out, I didn't eat and I was in a perennial confusional condition.

To try to improve my situation my best friend proposed me to make a vacation lodging for a week in her vacations house, a delicious cottage placed near a lake, in an isolated and completely uninhabited zone during that period of the year. I accepted only for doing her happy, honestly I didn't see anything of profit.

Of the first days I don't almost remember anything... I was touching the apex of my desperation, the only things that I remember were that I often stopped watching the lake, sitting on a bench situated in the garden of the residence, observing what surrounded me, reflecting on the cruelty of the life shedding litres of tears. They have been ugly and difficult days, but suddenly something very strange happened to me, something that could not be explained. A morning, in fact, I oddly woke up happy, all of my worries and my problems were suddenly faded away, disappeared out of my mind. I didn't succeed to explain this phenomenon; everything was so perfect, after so much time I felt reborn. It was a very beautiful day, the sun shone in the sky and I immediately ran in that garden that for days was the place of my desperation. I had never seen anything so beautiful, I saw everything with different eyes, I found the peace.

My beautiful reflections been interrupted by the presence of a young man that could not have more than twenty-seven years. He wore fisherman clothes, but he was not fishing, he was observing the blue sky sitting in the green lawn of an house near my cottage. I had never seen him before, additionally I knew that nobody lived those zones during that period of the year. He turned to me and, when he realized that I was looking at him, he made me a sign with his arm, and I responded to the waving. He immediately came to me astonished, and he started quickly to walk in my direction.

"Hi! - he told me smiling when he was close to me - How are you? ".

I said that everything was alright and when I asked the same question he interrupted me saying: "Don't you see how much beautiful is here? It seems like an heaven, it is so hard to believe that before I detested it. I worked here, I was a fisherman, but now I live here, and I see this place with different eyes.". I was spellbound for his words, he was describing what I was feeling. It almost seemed that the place had something magic, everything was changed.

“When have you arrived here? This morning?”, I asked him, “Me? No, it’s a long time that I don't move from this lake.”. I was surprised: ” I have never seen you before!.”

“I know it yet…” he answered me with a smile.

We stayed the whole day chatting, the hours passed happily and I talked about myself, and about the reasons that make me need to isolate myself in that earthly paradise and how suddenly everything changed in me. His company was very pleasant, even thought he didn't speak a lot about himself; it seemed like if that lake was his only reality. The following day passed in the same way. In the evening, while I was preparing me to assist to the amazing sunset on the lake, the telephone rang. Who could he be? By now it was a long time that I was there, and nobody had ever looked for me. I answered and on the other side of the telephone I heard her voice: ?Hello?!. it was her, Sarah, my friend that wanted to know how I was. ?Hi Sarah! -I answered happy – How are you?" , but she kept on repeating ‘hello’ and to say that she didn't hear me. So I had to hang up, but it made me feel a little bit, because I really wished to talk with her. The following day the scene repeated again various times and I noted that her voice became always more anxious and worried. I was sorry for her, I also tried to phone her back, but the thing worsened the situation. I thought a lot about these facts, and I often wondered what Sarah could think, I didn't want to make her stress. The day after I waited for her phone call, but it didn't arrive. I was asking me why she had not called me yet when I heard the house door opening downstairs. I leaned out from the staircases and I saw her… it was Sarah; she came to visit me. "Hi Sarah! " I shouted happily, but she didn't hear me, and she started to wander around the rooms in sorrowful way. "Hey Sara! " I repeated more times, but her… nothing; she moved in a nervous way, but when she went down the staircases to go in the basement I heard a cry of terror! "What is happened to you? " I howled frightened. I ran toward the basement, she was there, on the steps, paralyzed, immovable, trembling... When she fell down crying, I succeeded to see what shocked her. While Sarah stammered "Why have you done it?!" I saw it, but I couldn’t understand immediately … Why my lifeless body was there?

Can anybody correct this text in english?
I like your touching story. Good use of language and an interesting tale make your essay an easy read.

English is such a complex language. A lot of simple expressions use similes to the words you have chosen. Eg. apex of desperation is correct but peak of despair probably would be more common to read. Close friends intimates emotional closeness whilst near friends suggest physical closeness. This is a similar situation with vacation house and holiday house. Vacation and holiday are synonyms but holiday house or home is the expression commonly used. Conversation are usually started in a new paragraph and usually two spaces are inserted after a period (full stop).



I was going through a really ugly period in my life; life seemed pointless. Lately something had happened that was unbearable and I felt as though it was destroying me. All the people closest to me were worried for my health. I didn't go out; I didn't eat and I was was feeling perennially confused.

To try to improve my situation my best friend proposed that I take a week's vacation in her holiday house, a delicious cottage placed near a lake, isolated and completely uninhabited during that time of the year. I accepted only to make her happy. I honestly couldn't see any benefit for me..

For the first days of my stay at Sarah's lake house, I remember hardly anything... I was reaching the peak of my despair. All that I remember is that I often stopped to look at the lake, sitting on a bench situated in the garden, observing my surroundings and reflecting on the cruelty of the life, and shedding litres of tears.

There have been ugly and difficult days, but then something very strange happened to me, something that could not be explained. Oddly, one morning I woke up happy. All of my worries and my problems had suddenly faded away, disappeared out of my mind. I didn't know how to explain this phenomenon; everything was so perfect, after so much time I felt reborn. It was a beautiful day, the sun shone in the sky and I immediately ran into the garden that for days had been the place of my desperation. I had never seen anything so beautiful. I saw everything through different eyes and I found peace.

My beautiful reflections were interrupted by the presence of a young man that could not have more than twenty-seven years old. He wore fisherman clothes though he was not fishing; he was observing the blue sky, sitting in the green lawn of an house near my cottage. I had never seen him before and I knew that nobody lived there during that time of the year. He turned to me, and when he realized that I was looking at him, he waved at me. When I responded, I was astonished when he immediately started quickly to walk in my direction.

"Hi!" - he said, smiling when he was close to me, "How are you? "

I said that everything was alright and when I asked the same question he interrupted me saying: "Don't you see how much beauty is here? It seems like heaven. It is so hard to believe that before I detested it. I worked here; I was a fisherman, but now I live here I see this place through different eyes.".

I was spellbound by his words. He was describing exactly what I was feeling. It almost seemed that the place had something magic; everything had changed.

“When did you arrive here? This morning?” I asked him.

“Me? No, I've stayed by this lake a long time."

I was surprised: ” I have never seen you before!”

“I know…” he answered with a smile.

We stayed the whole day chatting, the hours passed happily and I talked about myself and about the reasons that made me need to isolate myself in that earthly paradise and how suddenly everything changed in me. His company was very pleasant, even thought he didn't speak a lot about himself. It seemed as though the lake was his only reality. The following day passed in the same way. In the evening, while I was preparing myself to watch the amazing sunset on the lake, the telephone rang. Who could it be, I wondered. It had been a long time since my arrival at the lake and nobody had ever tried to contact me. I answered and on the other side of the telephone, I heard her voice. "Hello?!", it was Sarah, my friend had called to see how I was.

"Hi Sarah!" I answered happy, "How are you?", but she kept on repeating ‘hello’ and to say that she couldn't hear me. Eventually I had to hang up, but it made me feel a little sad, because I really wished to talk with her.

The following day, the scene repeated itself at various times and I noted that her voice was becoming more anxious and worried. I was concerned for her so I tried to phone her back, but that only worsened the situation. I thought a lot about this and I wondered what Sarah could think. I didn't want to make her stress. The next day I waited for her phone call, but it never came. I was asking myself why she had not called yet when I heard the house door opening downstairs. I leaned out from the staircase and I saw her…Sarah; she came to visit me.

"Hi Sarah! ", I shouted happily, but she didn't hear me, and she started to wander around the rooms in sorrowful way.

"Hey Sarah! " I repeated but I got no response from her. She moved in a nervous way, and when she went down the staircases to go in the basement I heard a cry of terror!

"What's happened to you? " I howled, frightened.

I ran toward the basement and she was there, on the steps, paralyzed, immovable, trembling... When Sarah fell down crying and stammerring, Why have you done it?!, I finally saw what had shocked her. I saw it, but I couldn’t understand immediately … Why my lifeless body was there?
Reply:cheater. =)
Reply:Well I started to read it then realised that I was fast running out of life so I gave up.
Reply:Yes. I absolutely can. Can you?
Reply:Only if you pay me :-)
Reply:its a msg or a notice ??
Reply:i prefer to die
Reply:Sorry far too long...........my lifeless body would still be here to.
Reply:Please don't give up your day job in the hope of becoming a writer.



On a positive note, without having read every word, your spelling looks pretty good. Believe me, that is a real plus!
Reply:I would really like to help you but your text is far too long. The spelling is pretty good but there are a host of grammatical errors. Good luck anyway. x
Reply:I guess...its your writing and its ur homework,but u are unsure whether there is any wrong word or sentense,right?